Currently untitled Project (need feedback)

[Zerul]

*DELTED BY ZERUL*

 

[Zerul]

come on any feedback?

did you like it?
did you hate it?

come on anything. i want feedback on weather or not i should continue with this idea or just throw it off to the side for another day.

 

[Zerul]

is no one going to give feedback? (Rustic you dont count i need more than 1 person to see if people would be intrested in seeing more from this fanfiction.) still untitled. kind of a peve with me where if i name it i want to do something with it. remaining untitiled keeps my mind free.

 

[Hikaru54]

I've made some corrections and I like it! You can write pretty good!

 

[ThatSquidYouKnow]

It kinda uses he and other pronouns a bit too much. Maybe mix it up with an it or something

Concept is nice tho

 

[Zerul]

@ThatSquidYouKnow i used he alot as it didn't establish a name yet. i use names alot more than i do He/She in my other fanfics.