Return of Mammalians vs Jeff in the Secret of the Salmonids

[jeffthesquid]

I'm a writer so what do you all think of the story Return of the Mammalians. Do you all think it's weak? How does it compare in quality to Jeff in the Secret of the Salmonids? Let's say I was a dev working from Nintendo and I'm in charge of writing a story for Splatoon 4. If you played Splatoon 4 would you give it good marks because of the story mode Jeff in the Secret of the Salmonids?

https://www.frankusthenerd.tech/hog-boards <- Where I'm writing Jeff in the Secret of the Salmonids. Almost done but not quite. I want some feedback!